211-985大学 点击： 2019-01-09
大学见过的人多了，在很多人的地方说英语的话大家应该不会结巴了吧。下面是烟花美文网小编给大家整理的描写人物的大学英语作文，供大家参阅!
A Person I Admire——Franklin Roosevelt
Times need heroes, and heroes stand out. Franklin Roose velt is just a hero of the times. Well known for his unprecedented 13 years as the President of U. S. , he is regarded as a savior of America. However, it is not his brilliant achievements that attract me. What I really admire are some qualities shining in his whole life such as fortitude, courage and also his amiability.
His early time, I mean before his forties, was smooth. He was born rich and had a happy marriage. After graduating from Harvard, he served in the Navy. At that time, he had already shown his remarkable leadership and since his uncle was a President, he would surely enter the political arena. But everything changed when he was 39. Healthy and strong as he was, he was attacked by polio after swimming, which caused the life long de formity in his legs. It was extremely hard for this ambitious man to face the misfortune. He was, of course, in a bad mood and wanted to give up all his dreams at first. Then, after careful thinking, he finally decided to bestir himself. He was not a man
easy to surrender. Again he took part in political activities and,at the same time, practiced standing up and then walking with a stick. Eventually this brave man won the battle against fate. He became the only disabled President in American history and unprecedentedly served four terms. All should be attributed to his fortitude.
"The only thing we fear is fear itself." This famous saying now has spread all over the world and encouraged lots of people.Roosevelt first said it, and as a great leader, he made all his people believe it. He practiced what he preached for he was surely a courageous person challenging the tradition. He formulated new policies to help his nation out of the Depression. He declared war against Fascists though most of the Congressmen opposed him at that time. All proved that he was right for his courage was not rash but based on careful thinking. "A leader is one who dares to dream, and then, dares to achieve."
He was great, but not great in appearance. He looked like a kind grandpa at the first sight. He initiated the fireside chat to express his ideas and explain his policies in a relaxed atmosphere on radio. He always smiled sincerely when speaking and listening. These didn't lower his prestige but made him amiable and welcome.
He is surely not a perfect man no one can be perfect.Every age has its hero in the forefront, just like Franklin Roosevelt a man I admire.
简 评
本文记叙了作者心目中崇拜的人——美国前总统罗斯福。文章主要围绕他的毅力，勇气和和蔼可亲三种品质来展开。首先，作者以平实流畅的语言表现了他得了小儿麻痹症后如何战胜自我，重拾信心，身残志坚，并史无前例地四次当选美国总统的顽强毅力。其次，作者描述了罗斯福总统带领美国人民向传统挑战，度过经济大萧条时期，并不顾多数国会议员的反对向法西斯宣战的巨大勇气。最后，作者又表现了罗斯福总统和蔼可亲的一面，他真诚的笑容和他以炉边谈话的形式通过电波与美国人民在轻松的气氛中进行交流。
本文还引用了罗斯福总统的名言，如“The only thing we fear is fear itself.”’“A leader is one who dares tO dream，and then，dares toachieve.”等，增加了文章的说服力。
但文章仍需在以下几个方面有所改进：一、段落之间缺少承上启下的自然衔接(transition)，意义的转折显得生硬，比较突然。恰当地运用衔接手段可以将几个段落有机地结合成一个整体。二、段首最好能有依据概括大意，点明中心的主题句(topic sentence)，使读者对每一段的内容一目了然。三、第二段对罗斯福生平的介绍稍稍过长，破坏了文章整体的结构平衡，不妨将一些与主题无关的句子删去，效果会更好。
(点评教师：黄莺)
How would I gather up the courage to keep on living if I were doomed to spend my life in the completely soundless darkness? Helen Keller, a distinguished American author, gave this question a perfect answer by writing her glamorous legend that won her profound respect and great admiration throughout the world. Despite the physical handicaps, she lived her life to the full instead of crying, "Jesus, life is unfair!" Apparently, destiny worked no magic on her. Then where did she derive the strength to overcome the seemingly unconquerable difficulties while the able bodied often feel lost in despair when they are frustrated?
A calamitous disaster deprived Keller of many things we take for granted. She was totally cut off from the visible world and yearned for only three days to see. Though it seemed to be the wildest dream beyond fulfillment, she did see what we, born with sight, fail to see. Her love of life brought her bright eyes and sharp ears to appreciate the grandest beauty of nature and the sweetest whispers of the breeze. She took pleasure in every second. She lived with a heart filled with gratitude willing to digout the hidden truth of life. Entitled to sight and hearing, we usually abuse the faculties rather than cherish them as a precious gift. With that, we've missed the essence of life that lies around us in simple forms.
Keller's striking optimism might be her secret of success,but what made her achieve the impossible is that she lived where as we exist. People hardly recognize the value of something till it's lost. What if we were to lose our sight the next moment?
简 评
海伦.凯勒的故事是大家耳熟能详的。作者用这篇小巧精致、内涵深刻的散文，再一次向我们演绎了这位身残志坚的伟人谱写的生命之歌，用她饱含深情的笔墨对着我们的灵魂深处发出了真诚的呼声：珍惜生命，热爱每一个日日夜夜，做一名生活的强者吧!
作者语言功底雄厚，用词精练地道，表达恰如其分，宛如行云流水，最后的点题如画龙点睛，几乎无可挑剔：“Keller's striking optimism might be her secret Of success，but what made her achieve the impossible is that she lived whereas weexist.”全文犹如一块无瑕的美玉，让人爱不释手。从文章背后，不知读者是否能看到作者那颗玲珑剔透的心?
(点评教师：时丽娜)
October 18th, 2002, a sad day to most fans, for their idol Luo Wen left them forever. It's really bad news to the HK music circles, as well as to me.
Luo Wen, in my mind, was always strict with himself in his singing career. His early song were all vigorous and inspiring,partly for the special social environment at that time. Later, as the idol singers came up one after another, the old songs were not fit for the young fans, so he tried to change his style. And these years, he began to help some new singers to improve their skills. His songs were so influential that the HK Minister of Finance even used one to encourage all the citizens to work hard to gether and overcome the difficulty bravely.
Unfortunately, about two years ago, the news that he got cancer flew into our ears. However, he still went on singing and teaching. He had been struggling with the disease until the last minute. As the newspapers reported, he didn't close his eyes when he died. Someone said it was because he had a wish unfulfilled. He had hoped to give the last performance in HK in September, but his illness prevented him from doing that. It may be the biggest regret in his life. It's also said that he only weighed 32 kilograms at the end of his life. You can't imagine how much he had suffered from the disease. But every time we saw him in public, he was wearing a smile.
The next day, many newspapers reported his death and simultaneously praised him for his contribution to the HK music circles and his spirit of struggling against the disease. He set a good
example for those young people who don't value their lives.
简 评
在香港歌手罗文因病逝世之际，作者写了这篇文章，表达了对罗文的深切哀悼。文中，作者综述了罗文对香港歌坛的贡献，如在演唱风格上他不断地变化创新，致力于培养乐坛新人，他对公众的影响力等，颂扬了他与疾病做斗争的顽强精神，最后作者号召大家珍惜生命的价值。字里行间流露出作者对罗文的喜爱，对他不幸逝世的惋惜和对他人格的敬仰。
文中的一些具体细节和例子使文章生动不少，如香港财政司长用他的歌来鼓舞市民努力工作，克服困难;他因未完成最后的心愿而死不瞑目;他在饱受病魔折磨之际仍然面带微笑地出现在公众面前等。
但这篇文章在构思上的一大缺陷是由于对罗文的介绍涉及了多个方面，均是一笔带过，泛泛而谈，没有具体的展开，使文章显得较为空洞、缺乏主题和深度。如果能就其中的某一点层层深入展开论述，人物的形象会更加鲜明、饱满。文章的主题会更为明确，更为深刻。
此外，文中还有几处表达显得生硬，如第三段中the news that he got cancer flew into our ears不符合英语的表达习惯，可改为word came that he had cancer。还有his illness prevented him from doing that，最好改为he was too weak to do that。
(点评教师：黄莺)
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